11/28/2017 0 Comments Research Paper ReflectionIn this blog post, i will be answering questions about my research paper. After watching Reflective Writing and going over notes in class (which can be found in this blog post), I will be making revisions to my Research Paper Draft #1. Before making any changes to the draft, i will answer these questions about my paper so far. Who did you work with to compose your research paper? Was this a good approach? I did not work with anyone to compose my research paper. I think this was a good approach because I was able to include all of my personal thoughts and write the research paper the way I wanted to. What rhetorical mode and genre are you using? The rhetorical mode I am using is Argumentation and the genre I am using is MLA Research Paper. When did you write this project? Good approach? I wrote this project on Friday November 17th and revised it on the 18th and the 21st. I think this was a good approach because I think I wrote the paper early enough so I had time to revise it and make corrections the best I could. Where did you write this project? Good approach? I wrote this project on my living room couch and revised it in my room. I think writing in both of these areas was a good approach because they were both quiet areas and I had no distractions around me. I was able to write all my thoughts down and get the paper done when I wanted to. Why did you choose to write about your chosen topic? Good choice? I chose to write about sex education in America because I think it is a growing problem. Michael Moore's movie Where to Invade Next inspired me to write about this topic. The pregnancy rate and the rate of STD’s are increasing in the country and I think America should try different approaches to lower those rates. This is a good choice because the more awareness is spread, the more consideration there could possibly be in school districts to make a change about sex education. How did it feel to write this argument ("during, after, and since")? Do you have any "if only" moments that can help you revise the draft? While I was writing my argument paper, I felt pretty good about it. Since I completed the annotated bibliography, I pretty much had all of the information I needed. I had to pick and choose what ideas and evidence would go where and how I would put together the whole paper. As I was writing, these pieces seemed to flow together and I had a good writing experience. After writing the paper, I felt pretty proud of it. I thought I had a strong viewpoint along with strong pieces of evidence. I knew I needed to go back and switch a few things; and after I did that, I was still proud of what I had put together. I also thought my paper was very organized. Ever since writing the paper, I still feel pretty good about it. We talked about how to make revisions in class, so I know I want to go back to my paper and do some touch ups. My one “if only” moment is if only I did my paper bit by bit. I sat down and wrote the whole paper in one sitting. I feel like if I wrote one paragraph about one idea at a time, I could have thought of more creative ideas and maybe how to flow the paper a little better. How will you revise your argument?
I will revise my argument by going and revising one idea at a time, taking a break, and then approaching the other ideas. This will keep me focused on one idea at a time which will hopefully help me think and write the best I can about that particular topic. I will also go back and define any terms that the reader may not know about. I also will make sure that the exigency in the introduction paragraph is clear to the reader. Next, i am going to make sure that i reference the author or the article in every sentence. Then, I am going to add a header to the top left corner of my paper along with the page number in the top right corner of each page. Following that, I am going to add a works cited page which provides all of the sites I used in my essay and all of the authors that wrote them. Lastly, I will revise my conclusion paragraph and make sure my thesis statement is not word for word from my introduction, will add a strong closer, and ensure that there is no new information given in this paragraph.
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11/10/2017 4 Comments Annotated BibliographyWrite an annotated bibliography of at least four sources for your research paper. In the annotated bibliography, include the following:
A Counterargument:
11/2/2017 1 Comment Where to Invade Next? An Argument.
In this blog post, I will be discussing the topics that were mentioned in the movie Where to Invade Next. The summary to this movie can be read on this blog post. I will be discussing 3 different topics from this movie, creating a research question for each topic, and answering that research question.
11/2/2017 0 Comments Summary of Where to Invade Next
In the documentary Where to Invade Next, Michael Moore travels around the world to different countries. While he visits these countries, he finds different things that the people do in their country to try to be the happiest they can be. The purpose of his trip was to take ideas from these countries and try to incorporate them in America to try and make America a better place.
The first country he visited in the film was Italy, where workers have a 2 hour lunch break, receive 5 months maternity leave while getting paid, and they have 8 weeks of paid vacation a year. Then Michael went to France, where the school cafeteria gives their children a 4 course meal of actual food, instead of the slop us American children got in school cafeterias. France considers lunchtime an hour long class, and the children learn manners and how to eat civilly. France also teaches students about love; particularly, sexual love. America teaches kids abstinence, but France teaches kids how to be safe about sex to prevent outbreaks of sexually transmitted diseases and unplanned pregnancy. Moore then went to Finland which has the top education system in the world. The kids do not receive any homework because the people believe that kids should be kids and they should spend time with family, playing sports, etc. The kids go to school for only 20 hours a week, including their lunch break. The people in France do not give their kids standardize testing, and they think that America should stop this tradition because it is not beneficial in our lives. Another country Moore went to is Slovenia, where college students can go to college for free and they do not have any debt to pay off from school. Moore then goes to Germany, and finds out that people work 36 hours a week, they get paid for 40 hours, and when work is done, work is done. It is illegal for a boss to contact their workers for work related things if they are on vacation, and companies are not allowed to email their workers after work hours. The next country that was visited was Portugal, and here, all drugs are legal. Whether someone has drugs on them or they are using them, there is no illegal aspect about any of it. After Portugal, Moore traveled to Norway and saw how the prisoners are not treated horribly like they are here in America. The only thing that is taken away from them is their freedom, and they are not punished in any other way. Even in the highest security prison, the prisoners are given keys for their rooms, good food, clothes, and much more. The next country that Moore invaded was Tunisia, where the governments funds women’s health clinics, which includes abortion. The people here believe that women should have equal rights as men, and so do the people in Iceland. Iceland was the final country that Moore invaded. In Iceland, women had the exact same rights as men. There are women on boards and in almost every business, and having these women has proven that life in Iceland has definitely improved. In the end, all of these countries have particular rules and a way of living life, which makes them happy and appreciative about themselves and the people and the life around them. If America adopts some of these standards, we could too be as happy as these countries. |
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